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I would like to go somewhere where I could hear you talk,
Hear you tell me everything that ever mattered to you,
And if you enjoy making out under the moonlight,
I would then like to ask you to do it again.

I would like to cuddle your hand to my chest,
Curl your hair around my sleeves,
Wipe the snow from your eyes,
And flower that little smile to soften your lips.

And I love to feel your soft lips on me,
Emotions behind everything you whisper in my ears,
Happiness in every one of your silly smiles,
Touching the spark in me that is now completely yours.
Submitted as Literature Entry to the "Be a Spark Challenge"

My spark is what gives me passion in anything I do.
Inspired by Maria
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JoPierce Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013
Oh, how lucky is Maria?

What a beautiful romantic image. You write some lovely romantic poetry. You really do. Welcome to my watch list! <3
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013   Writer
*smiles* I think only she's qualified to truly answer this question ;p
Thank you for taking your time in leaving such supportive comments :thanks::eager:
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Lived-Laughed-Loving Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So sweet, I absolutely love the line, 'Emotions behind everything you whisper in my ears', it strikes a chord so amazing, because it's so true... words are how you say them, right?
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012   Writer
*smiles* words are also often how we feel them :)

Thank you for taking your time in leaving this feedback :hug:
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Lived-Laughed-Loving Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Touche, very true indeed
and no problem
(Though 'touche' is not the same when read without the accent, lol)
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zamira19 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a very beautiful poem.

I have one thing though, discard this part of my comment if you wish, but "making out" in the third line of stanza one seems a little harsh with the text around it. Maybe "kissing" would be a better word there. I don't know. It's up to you.

I love this poem. :D
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011   Writer
*smiles* I'm so happy you do :glomp: Thank you for taking your time in leaving this feedback :hug:
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zamira19 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Not a problem. :)
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TackyloveApple Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
awwww. thats so wonderful warms my heart :)
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011   Writer
*smiles* I'm happy it did! :eager:
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TackyloveApple Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*grins* ME TOO!!
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DemonGhoul Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:) Nawww this is really sweet, this Maria girl seems to be quite an inspire to you. It's adorable.
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2011   Writer
Lol :blushes:
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angelicdevil86 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011
simply lov it
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011   Writer
*blushes deeply* :blushes:
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AzourasTintomara Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011
Ooooh! This might be the best poem of yours I've read, and I've loved many of them so that's saying a lot! It's utterly wonderful! Beautiful images, and emotions that feel so real I can almost touch them!
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011   Writer
*grins* And every time you gives such perfect praises :glomp:
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celticlamb Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I love your poems so very much, great job, dear. :iconaawplz:
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010   Writer
:glomp: Thank you so much for your sweet continuous support of my writing! :eager:
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celticlamb Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Very much my pleasure, dear. <3
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010   Writer
*smiles happily* :glomp:
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celticlamb Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:iconaawplz:
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melisshaa Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010
adorable (:
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010   Writer
*smiles* Thank you so much for your continuous support of my writing :glomp:
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melisshaa Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
you are very welcome :D :hug:
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IshiKai Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010
Hope you'll win, it touched me. Even. A bit.

Oh, come on, Merry Xmas!
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010   Writer
Thank you! and no *laughs* it's not christmas yet ;P
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IshiKai Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2010
Well, now they are xD
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lunarballad Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010
<3
I REALLY like the imagery in this one.
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010   Writer
*laughs* I'm happy you do! :eager:
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lunarballad Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010
you're so welcome <3 :aww:
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quoctruong Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2010
I hate the fact that I love your work every-time. :faint:
Too Beautiful! :heart:
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010   Writer
Thank you so so much! :eager: :blushes:
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bindobud Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Yet again, beautiful writing style and conveying of emotion :heart:
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2010   Writer
thank you so much! :eager:
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bindobud Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You are so very welcome :)
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frost-berry Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010
Beautiful! :heart:
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010   Writer
Thank you so much for your continuous support of my writing! :glomp:
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frost-berry Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2010
:tighthug: No problem!
love it/you! xD
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IlLeoneOnesto Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010  Student General Artist
So beautiful!! It reminds me of my boyfriend :meow:
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010   Writer
I'm happy it does! :eager::hug:
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IlLeoneOnesto Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010  Student General Artist
Me too haha :love: :glomp:
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Lonely-Insomniac Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Wish I had a date like that :)
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010   Writer
*grins* you could, be patient :)
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Lonely-Insomniac Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:) well my hope for a perfect Christmas date in the snow is quickly passing by :/
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010   Writer
I had many with none *smiles* It's okay. :manhug:
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Lonely-Insomniac Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
many with none? :X
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Music-ItsMyLife Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010  Student Writer
This is amazingly beautiful.
I honestly wish this could be real...
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010   Writer
*smiles* of course it could be! be patient :glomp:
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Music-ItsMyLife Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2010  Student Writer
*looks at you* i try to be, but I just feel so left out when all my friends go out with their boyfriends.... *sighs*
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